Peer Review – Gabrielle Chidiac
“Hello there, Gabby, this was a nice poem – short but precise. The words flowed quite smoothly, and it really captured the nature of the complex yet interesting relationship between money and people. As well as how Murray was warning about how money has the potential to take over a person. I do like how you wrote “some some smart, some dumb, and some with no clue” which highlights that not everyone will fall prey to the temptations of money or greed. Though with this line “But don’t be fooled, it easily disguised” do you perhaps mean “it is easily disguised”?
Regardless, lovely little poem!”
Money On My Mind
Peer Review – Serena Saliba
“A very nice and formal letter with quite sophisticated language. Yet the way that you wrote the letter to Mr. White and its overall tone really does sound like it could be an actually sent letter expressing admiration to the author. I was quite interested that you mentioned about “Tall Poppy” syndrome. However, I am a little confused on your use of the term in this letter. Tall Poppy syndrome is where someone is attacked or criticised because of their talents and achievements which distinguish them from, or places them above their peers. I do think that the term can definitely have to do with Patrick White, but it is a little unclear why the mention of it is apparent – is it because Australia values education? Is it because of Mr White’s insistence on how the ordinary can be extraordinary?
Either way, it is still a nice read for a letter, and it actually is quite hard to write one, so great job on choosing to write one in the first place!”
Letter to Patrick White
Peer Review – Emily Dick
“To “frame and order of the world” really can be interpreted in many ways, and I do agree with a piece like The End of the Picnic, the piece is used to maintain a record of what happened. Many people don’t realize that art and poetry can be very powerful tools. They can be used to recount a time or place in history, they can be used to teach lessons, they can be used to spread news or teachings, and can even be used as a form of propaganda if taken in the wrong hands. Art and poetry, along with literature can be quite powerful forms, and it’s great that you mention how a poet’s job is supposed to be truthful to record the events. Though sadly, as I mentioned before, art and poetry if in the wrong hands and with the wrong intentions, can be used as something destructive, even.”
Peer Review – Anastasia Modderno
“I wholly agree with you on the notion that we are looking through the perspectives of the sun and stars, which highlights that people are all the same. Though we all may appear different, at the core, we are all still human. I do also think that because we are in the perspectives of such large and great celestial bodies, it highlights the fact that people are also small parts of a much bigger world, let alone the universe. In this way, the first part of the poem that speaks about what is considered “honourable” can be considered foolish and even trivial. I do feel that also in that sense, Gilmore is trying to convey that to people – that we are the same, and doing these things such as war and praising scars for possibly killing or even hurting someone else, is definitely not the way to go.”
Week 7 Reflection
Peer Review – Andrew Giammarco
“I actually never thought about it before, but your description of the painting really brings to light how posed the families look. The postures don’t look so genuine and do not give a true impression of a family photo or portrait. This definitely fits with the notion of assimilation that the Aborigines had to go through in order to “fit in.” The lack of shoes is however that one thing that makes them truly “fit in” with their own culture while at the same time opposing that of the society that tries to pose them and make them “fit in” to what they think is a respectable society.
The lack of other inhabitants also gives a big sense of isolation which they must have felt during those times. The vast negative space in the second painting really hammers the message of emptiness, and thus conveys loneliness.
A really great review. Good job.”
Intended disparateness in works by Russell Drysdale
Peer Review – Rachel Barker
“I wholly agree about your analysis on this painting – that despite its initially harsh and rugged appearance, there is a certain beauty that will only be admired if you take a closer look and go past the normal perception of beauty. Comparing this painting in particular to others really makes it all the more unique as well: especially if you compare this tree in Lister’s painting to that of the ones in Glover. The ones in Glover’s are sleek, elegant and even soft, yet they are only part of the background. Here with Lister, the tree is the subject, and stands strong, tall and proud: even like a person, which could even give the tree some notion of personification.”
Art Gallery of NSW Visit
Peer Review – Tara Briggs
“Perspective truly is an important aspect to writing. Especially if you want to understand several characters and their motivations, as well as just how they are in terms of personality. We also not only saw just Chaine and Wooral’s perspectives, but also Killam and Skelly. In page 47, the former was able to say the names of the flora much like how a scientist would, while the latter is quiet and hints that he could be homesick or just not like the setting of the bush compared to home. However, the perspectives between Wooral and Chaine are indeed notably the ones with the most contrast.”