La Lune Lament

In all my years of existence, it truly is astounding at times when I turn my gaze upon the Earth and observe its residents.

Never have I felt so confused and dumbfounded.  Such tiny specimens giving me confusion? It sounds quite impossible, doesn’t it? Even though I cannot compete to the colossal masses of Saturn or Jupiter, nor am I as extravagant as Mars or Venus, I am still a wonder to these seemingly simple specimens.

Something of beauty and wonder that many a song composed by them has sing.  If only I can share that similar fondness.

Do not get me wrong – there are times I can look fondly upon them when I see feats of comradery and compassion.  No matter how simple, it is something so intriguing to my lonesome self that even my cold surface may feel a beat.  Perhaps it is because, again, I am in my lonesome? Who can say?

Yet that is all that remains.  At the very least, I am what I am.

I am beautiful, yes, but I am also cold.  I am cold, hard and nobody can live with me without suffocating.  I am alone, and I am fine with my fate of being in my lonesome for even an eternity.

Yet the creatures that habit the Earth confuse me in that aspect.  They try to make themselves so difficult to read.  What is the point in doing such a thing? I do know the answer to that, as I have seen some of them who bear more power than others mask away their true intentions behind a friendly face.  But even I, who is rather far, can still plainly see and feel the malice and ill intentions hidden behind that friendly facade.

From such observations, I have only come to that sad conclusion.

Nothing has truly changed, nor will I think it ever will.

Even with this pessimistic turn of my nose, part of me nudges within, which is the reason why I still gaze upon such ordeals.  A little question I hope can be answered with years, decades, centuries or even millennia to come.  A question I hope will receive a positive answer for cold, hard and lonesome, old me.

Will they ever prove me wrong?


From the perspective of the moon, in a paragraph, describe the current situation on earth as you see it.

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4 thoughts on “La Lune Lament

  1. Hey Victoria I really enjoyed reading your blog post this week. I too chose the same question about the moon, I thought it was a perfect creative question to do as I have much to say on the current situation here on earth and if you do ever read it beware as my thoughts on the current situation the earth is in is quite dark as I had a small rant about us as humans. I loved your first person take on the earth looking down on humans as if they were ants looking at some positive things about them but describing these positive and happy humans as a mask to hide their malice and true intentions. Maybe it is good that the moon is isolated and alone because humans will only bring their malice and bad intentions to the moon? Just a thought. Overall a brilliant creative response Victoria :).

    Just one thing did you mean sung instead of sing in your third paragraph? Might want to edit that

    Something of beauty and wonder that many a song composed by them has sing.

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  2. Hi Victoria! Since I chose the same topic, I wanted to see how other people responded to the creative writing task. To my amazement, you’ve blown it out of the park quite literally. There’s always something much more profound and moving about a sad tale or a tragedy. Your story of the tragedy of the moon perfectly frames the folly that is mankind! My only suggestion would be to use your tragedy to make some kind of change. You end too soon with an ‘all hope is lost’ approach (of course this comment is purely my own opinion). You can use the tragedy to suggest something to the reader to make a change within them, since you already have the power to imbue the reader with a sense of foolishness in your writing. I most definitely wish to see more of your work!

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  4. A very interesting creative piece Victoria, sparked off no doubt by Erasmus. Well done!!! But check through and try to correct these items:

    *Please attend to editing your work carefully. Here is what I have picked up:
    *Even though I cannot compete to the colossal masses of Saturn or Jupiter,= Even though I cannot compete WITH the colossal masses of Saturn or Jupiter,
    * Something of beauty and wonder that many a song composed by them has sing. = This doesn’t make sense. Read it aloud and see if you can fix it.
    * I am in my lonesome? = I am lonesome?
    * Yet the creatures that habit the Earth= Yet the creatures that inhabit the Earth
    * But even I, who is rather far,= But even I, who am rather far,

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