Gloom and Doom

5/ Construct a topic of your own (in poetry, prose) that reflects on war in our times.

The first time I’ve written a poem.  Quite short, but I decided to give it a try.


Gloom and doom
What you feel when you see the creeping grey
Bang, bang, boom
The rapid firing in the fray

Sticks and stones
This is not at all for glory
Break my bones
This will destroy my body.

Out of breath
Should I turn left or right?
The door of death
Is it in front or behind me?

Chaos and ruin
A boiling pot of confusion
Trouble’s a brewin’
Red splashes grey

Horror and shock
What just happened? Did it really happen?
The pieces then lock
And I realize at that moment…

Who is the true winner in the end?


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2 thoughts on “Gloom and Doom

  1. As a first poem this is outstanding Victoria. It has energy, movement and it brings the feelings to life. How to improve it? Read it aloud to yourself slowly and see whether in hearing it aloud some words or phrases could be changed a little to make the meaning SING. Poetry is like adding music to prose, but not automatic rhythmic music, but music that suits the occasion.MG

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